04-13-2014, 02:48 PM
Erthona, thanks for your thoughts, you are very learned and your advice is always appreciated. The first line should properly read "senseless violence", which is the whole sad subject of the innocent who have suffered throughout history. The second line is metaphor, I suppose too abstract and forced, saying that this senseless violence destroys lives that could have been much happier.
I was afraid this poem might come across as self-righteous. The poem draws from my finding the abuse of animals a little worse than the abuse of people, since animals can't resist or speak out against abuse like people can. This, in turn, makes me wonder if that thought is okay, or if it's wrong to think like that. It's the reason why I ask, what manner of abuse should we be angriest at? Equally angry at it all, perhaps?
The last line is pure desperation. I wish we could put every abuser in an asylum and figure out why people act the way they do, but we can't and abuse will always happen. A better line would be, "How I wish this madness would subside."
I was afraid this poem might come across as self-righteous. The poem draws from my finding the abuse of animals a little worse than the abuse of people, since animals can't resist or speak out against abuse like people can. This, in turn, makes me wonder if that thought is okay, or if it's wrong to think like that. It's the reason why I ask, what manner of abuse should we be angriest at? Equally angry at it all, perhaps?
The last line is pure desperation. I wish we could put every abuser in an asylum and figure out why people act the way they do, but we can't and abuse will always happen. A better line would be, "How I wish this madness would subside."
*Warning: blatant tomfoolery above this line