Passing over

[Todd]

Hi Leanne, some comments and impressions for you. I love the title. It feels like it's doing double duty a sort of death and a play on Passover.

Why is Jesus on the front page
of today's paper, wearing clown shoes
and holding a sign protesting
against the overuse of onions
in roadside cafes?

--I know this isn't your intent but I thought of Fred Phelps and Westboro here. It's hard to decide how to read the opening as anything other than farce and enjoyment. The clown shoes and the protest sign make me think more of the trivialities of the followers than Jesus himself. The roadside cafe makes me think of the tent evangelist circuit. Though all of that likely isn't intended. It's a fun opening.

Where is his dignity, and where--great break
are his sandals? Someone broke his heart
and sent it to the Antiques Roadshow,
complete with provenance, for gilding and--I can hear the halting delivery in the "where" break above, still not fond of breaking on "and"
breakfast on live broadcast. His mother,
meaning well, pulled the splinters from his--It's a minimalist crucifixion these days. It is a time of inconvenience and onions (maybe fake tears for a production if you will). There is no cross in this day and age
palms and left them on her bedside table.

Nobody uses toothpicks anymore. Whatever--Nice transition to toothpicks another minimal set of nails
is stuck there, stays
rotting for days, until colonisation is complete.--colonisation is interesting. What two groups are coexisting here? I take this more as bacterial
Jesus watches Big Brother as the next
reject talks about things and stuff and--You know my bias given the comments on the world over and over I'd be tempted to pull those words up
the world keeps going into itself, folding,
abysmal. Trivia is a greasy spoon, an--consider a break on onion. So Trivia has layers. This feels like a jaded Second Coming homage in the way it leads to Golgotha
onion Golgotha and something that once
started with R.At first I thought Redemption, Resurrection, but Revolution, and than dropped R have a nice symmetry.

evolution

Enjoyed the read.

Best,

Todd