04-13-2014, 03:55 AM
Tom,
Clever use of trochee for first three lines then switching to iambs for last three, the cleverness is in landing on the half foot in trochee so it goes in to the iamb lines smoothly. In fact it causes all the lines to end on the hard count. So is the captain following after Odysseus, trying his luck with Scylla? "North by South" would indeed be an interesting way to go, I've been there myself, but forgot what I learned afterwords.
"the promised land, a lighthouse beam"
I think the light of which you speak is leagues beyond your reach.
Down you're dragged, down you'll stay it's no surprise, instead of safety on the beach.
Do you pull off this intended ship as poet despite it's name, and safely navigate the watery metaphor, as it is not the ship one navigates, but the ocean. Obviously, in this version the metaphor is much more difficult than most think, and thus are metaphorical crew end up sleeping with the fishes whilst Davey plays us a lullaby on his bassoon.
Sleepy, got to go...
dale
Clever use of trochee for first three lines then switching to iambs for last three, the cleverness is in landing on the half foot in trochee so it goes in to the iamb lines smoothly. In fact it causes all the lines to end on the hard count. So is the captain following after Odysseus, trying his luck with Scylla? "North by South" would indeed be an interesting way to go, I've been there myself, but forgot what I learned afterwords.
"the promised land, a lighthouse beam"
I think the light of which you speak is leagues beyond your reach.
Down you're dragged, down you'll stay it's no surprise, instead of safety on the beach.
Do you pull off this intended ship as poet despite it's name, and safely navigate the watery metaphor, as it is not the ship one navigates, but the ocean. Obviously, in this version the metaphor is much more difficult than most think, and thus are metaphorical crew end up sleeping with the fishes whilst Davey plays us a lullaby on his bassoon.
Sleepy, got to go...
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.