I Do Not Miss the Time That I Have Lost
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(02-08-2014, 02:25 AM)alatos Wrote:  I do not miss the time that I have lost
forever, looking in your playful eyes –
it’s better spent on something worth the cost
of living than to waste, to patronize
my heart with dollar signs. Then, you left me.
I wonder what I did so wrong! The tears
I cry at night, alone: are they the fee
you charge for love? They’ll haunt me through the years.


I do not miss the time that I have lost
forever, looking in your playful eyes – (Self-explanatory - I don't miss the time that I spent looking into your eyes, even though I can never get it back)
it’s better spent on something worth the cost
of living than to waste, to patronize
my heart with dollar signs. (At least I spent that time on something worth it (looking in your eyes). I could have wasted it making money (or anything else, really) Then, you left me.
I wonder what I did so wrong! The tears
I cry at night, alone: are they the fee
you charge for love? They’ll haunt me through the years. (Is sadness the charge for loving you? The sadness (and the tears) will never leave me
I understand the theme of cost throughout the poem but I do not think "dollar signs" works in that line of the poem. I suppose because throughout the poem is an emotional cost and dollar signs is more of a quantifiable cost.
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RE: I Do Not Miss the Time That I Have Lost - by just mercedes - 02-08-2014, 04:54 AM
RE: I Do Not Miss the Time That I Have Lost - by micpschm - 04-10-2014, 11:53 PM
RE: I Do Not Miss the Time That I Have Lost - by aniketk - 04-11-2014, 04:48 AM



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