The Doctrine Pedlar -edited

[Mopkins]

I think the yanks are actually in the minority here... we keep them in order and make sure they leave here properly edumacated

There are some threads on meter around the site, especially in the practice forum. Playing with structure is the best way to get your head around what's required, especially since it sounds as though you have a good natural rhythm. I'm working tomorrow but as I said, I'll have a shot at this on Saturday. It's always a pleasure to work on decent poems.

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And of course, Dale doesn't count as a yank because he's from Texas -- same as Ray -- and Texas is an entirely different universe.

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PPS. Margaret River? The yummiest sauvignon blanc in the country. You're so lucky.

Not to brag, but the average IQ of of the Aussies is higher than than Yanks....dunno what happened with me - missed out again. Texas being a different universe - who knows what their IQs are?


I'm glad that you think its a decent poem - I spent about a week and a half writing it back in 2001-it's my longest poem and the one I spent the most time on. I've had a break from writing and can't remember what I learned about meter the last time I went through a writing phase so I'll have to do more reading. I've been trying out meter in the double dactyls thread - and reading the posts on meter - hopefully it will all sink in.

I really appreciate your offer of editing this- very kind old chum.

Margaret River? I wish I could afford that - no I'm about 150km from there, inland, Boyup Brook (Country Music Capital) I call it Boring Brook - only interesting when there's a country music event on - if you like that sort of thing.

Thanks once again.

Marianne