The Doctrine Pedlar -edited

[Mopkins]

hello Leanne - thanks for reading and commenting - I'm a bit mystified as to why she sounds like a cannibal - that wasn't the intention.... veal for tea is a reference the the magazines being offered up on the fire like a sacrifice for God while she has 'veal' - which I used mainly for rhyming purposes and in reference to the golden calf... oh well. It's the meter especially I'd like to fix, that's the main reason I posted it here...

Ballad meter with the iambic tetrameter line and iambic trimeter line combine into one seven foot line, with rhyming couplets.

There are a few lines that seem a bit off like:

L4 If you read "tired" as a diphthong like tie-erd, with the stress on the "tie" it works, if as single syllable as we do in Texas "tard" it doesn't. As Australia is larger than my country of Texas, I'll give the "tie" to you.

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L18 "So are you then a genius to say you have Him sussed?"

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L19 "I'm Proud to say that I know God much better that my Peers -" "than" not "that"
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I enjoyed the rhyme of circumambulation and contraption, plus the double entendre in circumambulation.

I think less a witch/cannibal and more an angel (although at points she does seem ceeepy, but maybe she is just otherworldly). That is over looking the fact that she may be as she presents herself, simply crazy, and the point is even a crazy lady has more sense than a "Doctrine Pedlar". I see the veal, which with several other things seems a bit ad hoc, either for meter or rhyme, so I think more that than an indication of cannibalism. If it were a religious pun, it would need to be mutton as in the phrase. "like lambs to the slaughter." even granting the golden calf statement "Surpassing all the Golden Calves you find in human hearts!".

However, I too would be interested in the "veal for tea" comment as to me it is nonsensical, although I am unsure if "veal for tea" means the same as "veal with tea:, even so...


Dale

hello again Erthona - thanks for jumping in here. I say tired as two syllables (TIRed), and genius as three syllables (GENiUS) which is why those lines sound wrong to you... on reflection most people say GENEyuss so I'll keep your revision of that line. Thanks for pointing out the typo in line 19.

In Australia tea is another word for the evening meal, as is the case with wherever Leanne is from.

Mopkins is a contraction of my name (Marianne Hopkins) which I use because I'm unoriginal and can't think up Usernames. I don't mop if I can help it.... Thanks for commenting on this, I need all the help I can get and it is much appreciated.


MICPSCHM-

this is how I say those lines -

So READ those MAGaZINES and I'LL bring MORE in A fortNIGHT
If YOU SubSCRIBE as I do THEN you'll PROBably BE alRIGHT


I say 'PROBley' instead of probably which is why the meters wrong here to anyone without my probley problem.... might edit 'you'll probably' to 'you ought to' which will hopefully fix it.
Thanks for the input...