04-10-2014, 02:47 AM
I found it v readable, which is quite unusual, and probably not a compliment. The similes -and what a breath of fresh air, after so many .........metaphors!- were like a counter-point : partly Scottish and of the crofting counties, partly alien : not many sequoias north of the border. Yet the whole painted an old crofter to me, and I have been caught plenty of times by the tough old woody heather --an easy way to break an ankle!
Grammatically, the line preceding your brackets needs to end in a comma, and then the first 'like' needs to lose its capital, as otherwise, there is no main verb, and the phrase peters out. I say that, because this the Serious place, where normally I dare not breathe the rarefied air --- so that little comment is my entrance-ticket.
Be a pity if the Scots do drift off to nowhere.
Grammatically, the line preceding your brackets needs to end in a comma, and then the first 'like' needs to lose its capital, as otherwise, there is no main verb, and the phrase peters out. I say that, because this the Serious place, where normally I dare not breathe the rarefied air --- so that little comment is my entrance-ticket.
Be a pity if the Scots do drift off to nowhere.