04-09-2014, 11:01 PM
hello JakMak - thanks for commenting. I agree with you about how a true rhyme is preferable to a half rhyme. It could just be my Aussie accent but when I say them flaws and yours rhyme, as do lord and abroad - oh well. As for contraption and circumambulation, well i dunno. I'm pretty sure the meters wrong there too.
I rhymed this poem for a more humorous effect - don't know how well that's turned out but that was the intent.
I'm glad you liked it - thanks once again for commenting.
I rhymed this poem for a more humorous effect - don't know how well that's turned out but that was the intent.
I'm glad you liked it - thanks once again for commenting.

