This Old Man

[ChristopherSea]

Your title could serve as the first line of your poem, avoiding the this old man/an old man juxtaposition. Perhaps 'stiff as his collar' would serve your piece better. Without the white space and a bit more elongation that list string could illustrate those shoe worn miles (serving as the road). Is that a typo in the close? Would, 'All of these have lived' read any better for you? See what you think, thanks for the post.