Ezekiel's Tears
#11
I can't help but say this, bc it's a funny story--this one's based on a photo of a painting a girl from okcupid txted me, and I liked the painting and we were hitting it off, so I wrote this poem and sent it to her, somehow not grocking the fact that a creepy poem about bats eating flies might warn someone away.

She ended up canceling our first date hahaha

Ellajam--thanks for pointing out the weaknesses here. I'll give it another rewrite to see if I can get it to be consistently engaging. Thanks for the notes!
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Ezekiel's Tears - by crow - 04-06-2014, 06:07 AM
RE: Ezekiel's Tears - by Erthona - 04-06-2014, 10:13 AM
RE: Ezekiel's Tears - by milo - 04-06-2014, 10:16 AM
RE: Ezekiel's Tears - by crow - 04-06-2014, 04:48 PM
RE: Ezekiel's Tears - by milo - 04-07-2014, 08:49 AM
RE: Ezekiel's Tears - by crow - 04-08-2014, 06:29 PM
RE: Ezekiel's Tears - by ChristopherSea - 04-08-2014, 06:59 PM
RE: Ezekiel's Tears - by crow - 04-08-2014, 08:34 PM
RE: Ezekiel's Tears - by ellajam - 04-08-2014, 10:19 PM
RE: Ezekiel's Tears - by 71degrees - 04-09-2014, 12:27 AM
RE: Ezekiel's Tears - by crow - 04-09-2014, 12:30 AM
RE: Ezekiel's Tears - by ellajam - 04-09-2014, 02:32 AM
RE: Ezekiel's Tears - by ChristopherSea - 04-09-2014, 04:49 AM
RE: Ezekiel's Tears - by crow - 04-09-2014, 06:02 AM



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