04-08-2014, 02:17 PM
Speaking of hearing, what would you say is the difference between the 2 versions below?
Original
"He’ll fear showering in front of men;
dropping his bar of miracle soap."
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He’ll fear bathing in front of the men;
and dropping his miracle soap.
Can you hear and understand the difference?
He’ll fear bathing in front of the men;
and dropping his miracle soap.
This is now nearly all anapaest, with an iamb to start the second line.
Does that help you see how it is rhythmically different from the original version.
Dale
Original
"He’ll fear showering in front of men;
dropping his bar of miracle soap."
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He’ll fear bathing in front of the men;
and dropping his miracle soap.
Can you hear and understand the difference?
He’ll fear bathing in front of the men;
and dropping his miracle soap.
This is now nearly all anapaest, with an iamb to start the second line.
Does that help you see how it is rhythmically different from the original version.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.