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Two Eggs
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04-08-2014, 12:23 AM
A nice, succinct little poem here. The only change I see to improve it is to lessen the use of "two", it's two repetitive. Also, "two round eggs" towards the end makes this sound like the encounter of an overweight lesbian couple, don't know if that's the intended reading or not.
*Warning: blatant tomfoolery above this line
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RE: Two Eggs - by Malu - 09-14-2013, 03:29 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by shenaz - 09-14-2013, 03:31 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by Malu - 09-14-2013, 04:01 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by shenaz - 09-14-2013, 04:05 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by Snowbells - 09-14-2013, 09:17 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by shenaz - 09-14-2013, 05:23 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by nhanna1223 - 02-03-2014, 02:11 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by shenaz - 02-03-2014, 06:05 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by LickinLyrics - 02-03-2014, 07:16 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by tomoffing - 02-03-2014, 07:56 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by DominoMan - 02-03-2014, 02:41 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by kingmicahde - 02-07-2014, 07:26 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by shenaz - 02-08-2014, 02:12 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by kingmicahde - 02-08-2014, 04:31 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by shenaz - 02-08-2014, 03:58 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by Sheep - 02-11-2014, 06:29 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by shenaz - 02-12-2014, 03:17 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by cfgorman - 03-01-2014, 01:27 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by shenaz - 03-02-2014, 05:46 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by Izo - 03-15-2014, 07:56 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by WordJunky - 03-16-2014, 08:29 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by Babeanew - 04-04-2014, 09:17 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by Mopkins - 04-06-2014, 02:10 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by California - 04-07-2014, 07:40 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by kindofahippy - 04-08-2014, 12:23 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by Robert9614 - 04-22-2014, 08:35 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by Willpark - 04-29-2014, 12:54 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by RiverNotch - 04-29-2014, 06:17 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by constellation - 04-30-2014, 07:36 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by shenaz - 05-01-2014, 09:27 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by bbcashdollar - 05-12-2014, 06:03 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by SuicidalBlueJay - 05-12-2014, 11:22 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by newsclippings - 05-12-2014, 11:38 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by Igor - 02-28-2016, 11:06 AM
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