Hope
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Hey! Please consider this not even as advice but as food for thought! If you have a short poem you should avoid banal rhymes, and "I - fly into the sky" sounds a little bit banal. I tried to find a solution and here it is:

Let us ride to distances
Together hand
In hand

Conquer all that’s in our way
And leave no chance
To mend
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Hope - by LickinLyrics - 02-03-2014, 06:33 AM
RE: Hope - by California - 04-07-2014, 08:45 PM



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