04-07-2014, 04:17 AM
My saving grace- Good title
To my burning churning throbbing mind,
You sickening, black tar'd beast.
You occupy me constantly,
You tainted weighty thing. Is this a burden on ones soul or a heavy object
My darling manic bastion.}
Without you I am no-one.} I don't know what this says about me but I think these two lines work quit well.
To my dumb ignorant sense of pride,
you thick and unwavering idiot.
You are my golden armour,
broken and battered.
Shine on.
Without you I suffer.
To my deathly hateful gaze,
you cynical miserable eye.
You are my purifier,
my unforgiving guard.
Stay the walls.
Without you I am a sheep.
At last to you my burning passion,
she ignite's my phoenix heart.
She is my light,
my muse.
Keep the peace my saving grace.
Without you I'm forsaken
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To my burning churning throbbing mind,
You sickening, black tar'd beast.
You occupy me constantly,
You tainted weighty thing. Is this a burden on ones soul or a heavy object
My darling manic bastion.}
Without you I am no-one.} I don't know what this says about me but I think these two lines work quit well.
To my dumb ignorant sense of pride,
you thick and unwavering idiot.
You are my golden armour,
broken and battered.
Shine on.
Without you I suffer.
To my deathly hateful gaze,
you cynical miserable eye.
You are my purifier,
my unforgiving guard.
Stay the walls.
Without you I am a sheep.
At last to you my burning passion,
she ignite's my phoenix heart.
She is my light,
my muse.
Keep the peace my saving grace.
Without you I'm forsaken
You have received some very good input from others here. If you truly wish to be a writer of poetry or other forms of written expression you must READ OFTEN and write often. Then Read every thing that you have written Over and Over. Stay on this site as often as possible, there is much opportunity learn here.