When the Fat Lady Sings

[Carousal]

Is the Bugs Bunny cartoon the one where he sings from the "Der Ring des Nibelungen" the Ride of the Valkyries by Brünnhilde, the Barber of Seville, and Something from the "Marriage of Figaro"? Regardless, I have no problem with the title. I also like you second edit better, much clearer, although I could see you going in whole hog and ending with a period

My main problem with this is you seem to bounce (apropos) from elegant to toe tapping, from soft to harsh. I find it creates a bit of cognitive dissonance to your overall musical score, and although "such is life", such is not poetry, at least not without the intent to contrast, which you do not have. Instead you write as though soft and harsh, elegant and toe tapping were all the same, leaving your song without resolution, and not in a way that is music to the ears

dale

I think the original poem was better and I am not going to replace any of your wordings with suggestions that suit my own preferences, it reads perfectly OK as it is.

I do have a bit of an issue with the Chopin songs however. True, he did write around 20 or so songs in Polish that are translated into English. But in my opinion he should have stuck with what he was brilliant at i.e. they aint all that good.

You could write your own lyrics to his piano pieces but be careful you may end up with something like ‘I’m always Chasing Rainbows’ set to Fantaisie-Impromptu which is god awful.

I liked your poem a lot which was reasonable short, precise and to the point. Also it didn’t require me to scramble my brains to comprehend the meaning or trying to impress me with the vast extent of your vocabulary.

Nice one.

Regards.