04-06-2014, 10:36 PM
hello Ellajam and thanks for the welcome and thumbs up on my crits. (nervously undertaken - I'm no expert)
lovesick is a bit weak isn't it - perhaps 'wanton' instead... to go with all the other w's in the first verse. Meter's not my strong point - and drew a dew might be better as drew a drop...
Food for thought! Thanks for reading and commenting - it's appreciated.
lovesick is a bit weak isn't it - perhaps 'wanton' instead... to go with all the other w's in the first verse. Meter's not my strong point - and drew a dew might be better as drew a drop...
Food for thought! Thanks for reading and commenting - it's appreciated.