Enûma Eliš 1st edit, Leanne, Philatone

[Erthona]

Thanks Brownlie,

I think all of those are spot on, and will incorporate them. I agree the tone is a tad too pompous, and I need to soften it, as well as some of the archaic speech, i.e. syntax reversal.

I appreciate the effort it took, this is a fairly long poem to wade through.

Thanks again,

dale