Two Eggs

[Babeanew]

Hi,

Nice poem I quite like it, it is cute.
Personally I'd take out the we and the and,

The "we" because at "the heat is on" the reader is with the eggs in the action, the "we" brings back narration, and kind of forces a step back.

The "and" that's really a matter of taste, makes sense to me, as if this was the description of a boxing match.

Lastly I would had a verse either after "we splutter and curdle" or "two round eggs" because the ending seems to fall a little off.

Regards

Alex