Lover Under Construction

[ChristopherSea]

Hiya Chris. Thank you JG.
Your piece inspired the idea for my found poem.

Great , I used to do found pieces comprised with other poet's titles. It is quite the challenge.

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Hello Chris, my first thought was that a lot of the poem could be cut.

The observations about Mona lisa, V- man, Monroe, and Taylor were a distraction for me, as were the people, painting and v-man himself.

The use of "muddle" for the collection of "body bags" did not work for me, but the idea behind why you have the body bags is great.

The whole of V6 did not work for me, It just does not seem to fit with the rest.

I am still thinking on the last verse, I like the "cavern resonating with the shed.

Regards. JG

Thanks for stopping by to read and share your critique. I don't have plans to cut anything from the piece. I think it has the right progression, i.e. :
1) need to build a lover
2) what materials to choose
3&4) what blue print to use (classic artist or Hollywood icon)
5) the work, effort, time required
6) why not the ethereal/goddess ideal?
7) a goddess struggles with the same problem!

I chose 'muddle' for alliteration with 'amass' and to contrast 'archive.' I will mull over that muddle. Cheers/Chris