04-03-2014, 04:40 AM
Is the Bugs Bunny cartoon the one where he sings from the "Der Ring des Nibelungen" the Ride of the Valkyries by Brünnhilde, the Barber of Seville, and Something from the "Marriage of Figaro"? Regardless, I have no problem with the title. I also like you second edit better, much clearer, although I could see you going in whole hog and ending with a period 
My main problem with this is you seem to bounce (apropos) from elegant to toe tapping, from soft to harsh. I find it creates a bit of cognitive dissonance to your overall musical score, and although "such is life", such is not poetry, at least not without the intent to contrast, which you do not have. Instead you write as though soft and harsh, elegant and toe tapping were all the same, leaving your song without resolution, and not in a way that is music to the ears
dale
My main problem with this is you seem to bounce (apropos) from elegant to toe tapping, from soft to harsh. I find it creates a bit of cognitive dissonance to your overall musical score, and although "such is life", such is not poetry, at least not without the intent to contrast, which you do not have. Instead you write as though soft and harsh, elegant and toe tapping were all the same, leaving your song without resolution, and not in a way that is music to the ears
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.