Black Widow

[LV Moose]

I would use the direct article on the last line, plus widow needs to be possessive.

the widow's kiss awaits them there.

To me the rhyme seems forced. For economy's sake I think I would go with something like.(not a suggestion, just examples)

"She sits amid her silken treads,
a victim to ensnare,
red hourglass signals their fate,
the widow's kiss awaits"

--or--

She sits amid her silken treads,
a victim to ensnare.
the hourglass portends his fate,
a widow's kiss for him awaits.

Just some ways to play with it.

Dale

Thank you, Dale.
Of the two, I prefer the latter.
I'll think on it more over the next couple of days.

Moose