Begin not the Beguine

[Erthona]

TE,

Yes, I am the comma king. I agree, it's is misleading, it was suppose to be a contraction for "it has", not it is. A common colloquial phrase from my part of the country, but certainly not widespread I would think. So, yes, "it's" wrong

"I'm not sure what Hemingway-sharp edges are. Wasn't he a little rough around the edges for the day? (If that's what is being said you should use the hyphen.)"

Reference to boats like Hemingway sailed, and that they like him were rough, but I agree, your critique is still valid and it needs a high-fin!

"I don't think the break in the middle of uncer-tainty was very successful, but that's just my take."

Just a bit of fun on my part(a poke at certain types of writing), plus it breaks the line at the right place

Thanks for your comments, most I will use. Now if only you had pointed out the commas I needed to remove I'd hardly have to work at all.

Thanks,

dale
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Heart,

"I wonder if a comma is needed at the end of line three, trivial, I know."

I don't know either, but I will be happy to remove it (actually, yes I do know, I just sometimes get focused on other things when editing to post. Oftentimes I put commas in for rhythm or cadence markers, and forget to remove them).

"the beguine to be a foxtrot style of dance so I wondered if this really applies"

No, probably not today, more like a slow rumba (but it's not dirty dancing). It was more of the rhythm, Boom, chit-chit, boom-chit-boom-chit, Boom, chit-chit, and also as a reference to Cole Porter song:

"so don't let them begin the beguine
let the love that was once a fire
remain an ember
let it sleep like the dead desire I only remember
when they begin the beguine"

As far as sweaty sex in Martinique, as it is in the Caribbean in 1935, most sex would be sweaty

However as I think of it, the dance was probably not the most apt metaphor for love/freedom, but I still love the song and the beat, and during that time places like Martinique were where people went to let their hair down a little, kind of like Havana in "Guys and Dolls" (I played Nicely-Nicely Johnson at the "Backdoor theater" in Wichita Falls, Texas - Big Time, eh?).

Thanks for your comments,

Dale