Body parts

[Keith]

Ignoramus that I am, I've never heard of this practice/hobby. I like this poem. Nice and effective rewrite, too. My only wonder on the first stanza rewrite (better/tighter than the original) is in wondering if the reader will know that...

a rat trapped in a heated copper pot

...is that guilt in the stomach of the person in the poem (or at least that's how I took it, or wanted to). I don't know, I don't know. I keep thinking something like (I'm just talking *idea* here, not my word/phrase choice)...but guilt is in my stomach now/a rat trapped in a heated copper pot...

I honestly think this a *tweak* or two from done, in the books. Again, I like this poem.

Thanks for your comment NN I agree and have decided to drop the rat copper pot and stomach, as a bit OTT and hammer horror, thanks for the help. Keith

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knowing now the illegality of it, makes it even more enjoyable. also makes the goblin's purpose more sinister.

may have done a bit of disservice by having the mention of goblin and frankenstein in the same poem... takes away from both to me.

nice words.

thanks.

Hi Pickles
I chose Goblins for their baby robbing activities and Frank just seem to sum up the collection of parts on the plate. Thanks for your comments Keith