Begin not the Beguine
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Here a comma, there, a comma, ever,y,where, a, comma, comma. Does N suppose he can do it because it's been done before, or is he saying he could do it, /but/ it's already been done before?

I'm not sure what Hemingway-sharp edges are. Wasn't he a little rough around the edges for the day? (If that's what is being said you should use the hyphen.)

I don't think the break in the middle of uncer-tainty was very successful, but that's just my take.
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Begin not the Beguine - by Erthona - 03-30-2014, 03:13 AM
RE: Begin not the Beguine - by Brownlie - 03-30-2014, 01:45 PM
RE: Begin not the Beguine - by Erthona - 03-30-2014, 02:11 PM
RE: Begin not the Beguine - by trueenigma - 03-30-2014, 11:14 PM
RE: Begin not the Beguine - by Heartafire - 03-31-2014, 05:26 AM
RE: Begin not the Beguine - by Erthona - 03-31-2014, 09:32 AM
RE: Begin not the Beguine - by ChristopherSea - 03-31-2014, 07:06 PM
RE: Begin not the Beguine - by Erthona - 04-01-2014, 01:50 PM
RE: Begin not the Beguine - by tectak - 04-02-2014, 12:32 AM
RE: Begin not the Beguine - by Erthona - 04-02-2014, 03:26 AM
RE: Begin not the Beguine - by billy - 04-05-2014, 12:57 AM



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