Triptych

[milo]

Yeah it's just bunged together, let all hang out, free verse. Like you say it's not even English, or any language.

It's not like I've applied what Judith Gick, one of the most influential Shakespearean and classical teachers of the 20th century, taught me about spoken verse, phrasing, pacing, meter etc. I mean why would I? When the dithyrambs can be turned into anapests for dramatic effect, and the variations mished and mashed, to create mono-tonal uniformity.

How dare i write piece not intended to lie decorously on the page, but to take breath and be heard in a declamatory style. The shame of it.

Hey, it's your poem, if you're happy with it that's fine, you don't need to make up stories. If you want, I could do an actual scan of the first few lines for you or at least point you in the direction of some threads on English meter or blank verse.

It would be interesting to see how milo the meter-man would diagram the same passages.

I follow the crowd down to the river. iFOL lowtheCROWD DOWNto theRIV er iamb anapaest troche iamb fem ending(hypermetric) 4 feet no discernible meter
It is cold, even for morning it's cold. ITis COLDE venforMORN ingit'sCOLD troche spondee anapaest anapaest 4 feet no discernible meter
The Jordan shimmers through the reeds, green silk, theJOR danSHIM ersTHROUGH theREEDS greenSILK 5 feet perfect iambic pentameter
licking the foot prints at the water's edge LICKing theFOOT printsAT theWA tersEDGE 5 feet troche iamb iamb iamb iamb iambic pentameter common sub (1 awk prom on AT)

*note 1 without a predominant meter the rule of three is used for all promotion/demotion with testing for nearest syllables.

*note 2 scansion on free verse is mostly pointless.