Triptych
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(03-27-2014, 08:37 PM)jeremyyoung Wrote:  Really?

So using unstressed dithyrambs and iambs....

I/fol/low the/CROWD down/TO the/riv/er.
It/is/cold ev/EN for/morn/ing it's/COLD.
The/Jor/dan shim/MERS through/the/reeds, green/SILK,
lick/ing/the foot/PRINTS at/THE wat/er's/edge
in/TO flat/NESS.

And changing to iambs, in the Greek style, for descriptive passages

He/WAITS for/US, glow/ING,
on/THE far/BANK, hand/IN wel/COME to/CROSS.

before returning to Bacchanal

The/New sun/DAZZLES, some/stag/ger bright/blind/ed
in/TO the/wa/ter, the/SPLASH of//feet/dulls

is not using meter, or rhythm... and it's MERELY free verse.

Well if you say so...
Not only is it free verse, your scan is wrong. About half the feet you are attempting to identify don't exist in English an some don't exist in any language. The poem is a random mish mash of mostly iambs and anapaests with an occasional troche thrown in.
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Messages In This Thread
Triptych - by jeremyyoung - 03-25-2014, 09:10 PM
RE: Triptych - by ChristopherSea - 03-25-2014, 09:52 PM
RE: Triptych - by jeremyyoung - 03-25-2014, 10:52 PM
RE: Triptych - by ChristopherSea - 03-25-2014, 11:02 PM
RE: Triptych - by jeremyyoung - 03-25-2014, 11:26 PM
RE: Triptych - by ChristopherSea - 03-26-2014, 12:31 AM
RE: Triptych - by jeremyyoung - 03-26-2014, 12:47 AM
RE: Triptych - by ChristopherSea - 03-26-2014, 12:52 AM
RE: Triptych - by jeremyyoung - 03-26-2014, 01:00 AM
RE: Triptych - by tectak - 03-26-2014, 03:21 AM
RE: Triptych - by jeremyyoung - 03-26-2014, 05:51 AM
RE: Triptych - by ChristopherSea - 03-26-2014, 08:13 AM
RE: Triptych - by jeremyyoung - 03-26-2014, 08:18 AM
RE: Triptych - by ChristopherSea - 03-26-2014, 08:57 AM
RE: Triptych - by milo - 03-26-2014, 09:11 AM
RE: Triptych - by jeremyyoung - 03-26-2014, 09:17 AM
RE: Triptych - by ChristopherSea - 03-26-2014, 10:52 AM
RE: Triptych - by cidermaid - 03-26-2014, 05:08 PM
RE: Triptych - by jeremyyoung - 03-26-2014, 05:13 PM
RE: Triptych - by milo - 03-27-2014, 10:04 AM
RE: Triptych - by jeremyyoung - 03-27-2014, 08:26 AM
RE: Triptych - by jeremyyoung - 03-27-2014, 08:37 PM
RE: Triptych - by milo - 03-27-2014, 10:51 PM
RE: Triptych - by jeremyyoung - 03-27-2014, 11:56 PM
RE: Triptych - by milo - 03-28-2014, 12:03 AM
RE: Triptych - by ChristopherSea - 03-28-2014, 12:10 AM
RE: Triptych - by milo - 03-28-2014, 08:10 AM
RE: Triptych - by Erthona - 03-13-2015, 03:56 AM



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