03-26-2014, 06:06 PM
(03-26-2014, 10:54 AM)Erthona Wrote: Keith,Thanks Dale it was a bit clunky I have tried to smooth thing out, not sure its perfect but its better. Thanks for the feedback. Keith
This is pretty funny, but for me the jumping in line length really gets in the way of enjoying it. This starts off in ballad meter, which is a good meter to use for this sort of poem, I just wished you'd stayed with it.
Dale
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