03-26-2014, 12:19 AM
generally i think you have a few to many yoda style lines. that apart. i think you have the makings of a double sonnet with very little work.
if this were about me i'd feel very depressed
though perhaps not, i like the sly feel it imparts. it gives me a feeling that the style and substance are not just about the poem but also the poet.
if this were about me i'd feel very depressed
though perhaps not, i like the sly feel it imparts. it gives me a feeling that the style and substance are not just about the poem but also the poet.