03-25-2014, 12:52 AM
Tom, a couple other observations on a second pass: 'ghastly leant, bent tree tacks' was a bit of a tongue-twisting-meter-beater on the second read. See what you think. If you love it, let's blame my problems with it on billy (just saw his comment while typing this 
). I was wondering if you would consider substituting swat for slap. I like swat the fly and the stomp/swat/swing sound progression is nice. Can you 'call(s) the cock' to keep in line with the other 'transitional chants'? I still like it and enjoyed the flashback. Have a great one./Chris
). I was wondering if you would consider substituting swat for slap. I like swat the fly and the stomp/swat/swing sound progression is nice. Can you 'call(s) the cock' to keep in line with the other 'transitional chants'? I still like it and enjoyed the flashback. Have a great one./Chris
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris