Orca Strike

[chrisgas]

Second Edit

Piercing eyes are sounding deep
seals in shallow play.
Timing waits a second beat
for a trigger strike in the bay

Slicing through, shearing wide
the swallowed scream of struggle cries.
Schools out, playing time.
Ricochet.

Cold dead eyes now pulling deep
by tail, teeth are no danger.
A spiralled waltz
In a downward meet
no air swallowed, only water.

So now the deathly rise,
immersing seas through mirrored skies.
Splashing spreads
rippling red
and now the leopard's dead.

still not sure of my punctuation etc.
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First Edit

Piercing eyes are sounding deep
Seals in shallows play
Timing waits a second beat
Fate strikes the match

Cutting, shearing through clear waters
A swallowed scream cries
Schools out, playing time
Richochet

Eyes now colder
Pulling deep
By tail teeth are no danger
Swallows no air

It now flies
Through mirrored skies
Splash, rippling red
The leopard's dead

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ORIGINAL

I have read a little, so I'm just using this as a sounder, "If that is ok"? I will re edit my others later. Got a good start on my daughter's bedroom!

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Sounding deep
Shallows to play
Timing waits
Strikes the match

Cutting, shearing
Swallowed scream
Schools out
Ricochet

Piercing eyes
Pulling deep
By tail
Swallows no air

Now flies
Rippling red
Splash
It's dead