Miss Confection

[ChristopherSea]

I think that the poem is a good idea. However it feels a tad hard to understand, and I feel you could rely a bit less on descriptive words at all times. I think some of the vocabulary does not add much to the piece, and feels overbearing the overarching purpose of the play, in later revisions weigh every word heavily.

Thanks for reading the piece and sharing your impressions. It is written in fairly plain language with common images as an extended metaphor.