Miss Confection
#13
I think that the poem is a good idea. However it feels a tad hard to understand, and I feel you could rely a bit less on descriptive words at all times. I think some of the vocabulary does not add much to the piece, and feels overbearing the overarching purpose of the play, in later revisions weigh every word heavily. Smile
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Miss Confection - by ChristopherSea - 03-06-2014, 01:00 AM
RE: Ms. Confection - by jeremyyoung - 03-06-2014, 10:33 AM
RE: Ms. Confection - by ChristopherSea - 03-06-2014, 07:43 PM
RE: Ms. Confection - by Erthona - 03-06-2014, 11:22 AM
RE: Miss-Confection - by ChristopherSea - 03-07-2014, 12:33 AM
RE: Ms. Confection - by geoff - 03-06-2014, 12:29 PM
RE: Miss-Confection (edit 1) - by jeremyyoung - 03-07-2014, 02:14 AM
RE: Miss-Confection (edit 1) - by ChristopherSea - 03-07-2014, 02:29 AM
RE: Miss-Confection (edit 1) - by jeremyyoung - 03-07-2014, 03:17 AM
RE: Miss-Confection (edit 1) - by ChristopherSea - 03-07-2014, 05:26 AM
RE: Miss-Confection (edit 1) - by Erthona - 03-07-2014, 05:37 AM
RE: Miss-Confection (edit 1) - by ChristopherSea - 03-07-2014, 05:47 AM
RE: Miss Confection - by L Oquence - 03-21-2014, 09:59 AM
RE: Miss Confection - by ChristopherSea - 03-21-2014, 06:38 PM



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