Against the Sea
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I‘m afraid there is no easy way to say this but this is not very good. I can’t recall finding so many cliché’s in such a few lines. I could go on and others probably will, but there isn’t much point because the only advice I could offer you is read poetry, a lot of poetry.
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Against the Sea - by chrisgas - 03-21-2014, 06:04 AM
RE: Against the Sea - by Hermit - 03-21-2014, 07:17 AM
RE: Against the Sea - by Carousal - 03-21-2014, 07:34 AM
RE: Against the Sea - by chrisgas - 03-21-2014, 12:58 PM
RE: Against the Sea - by ellajam - 03-21-2014, 09:56 PM
RE: Against the Sea - by chrisgas - 03-22-2014, 12:48 AM
RE: Against the Sea - by Carousal - 03-21-2014, 10:11 PM
RE: Against the Sea - by billy - 03-21-2014, 11:52 PM
RE: Against the Sea - by Hermit - 03-25-2014, 12:23 PM



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