03-21-2014, 06:02 AM
This is a good piece because of the repetition of the key phrase Elated. It gives you a feeling of the good that is present in every day of your life. His kids are the thing that makes him happy. It has a good flow,and its rhymes could be approximate but they made sense. A good piece of advice from Rowans says, "balancing each word with the others. The meaning, the multiple meanings, the sounds, the tone, the rhythm, the rhythms. Balancing each stanza, in some way, with the others. Each word, each line, each sentence, each stanza," and it couldn't have been more accurate.