03-21-2014, 03:43 AM
First thank you for your comments. 
The last line on the second and third stanza were intentional as I felt these would be voiced with a trailing off to almost a whisper. I think on the third stanza, it shouldn't be a question mark. I am also not sure about the structure of the first and second "should they be split into three, or joined into one?"
My punctuation amongst many other things is suspect too! As to the other "last lines" could you perhaps point out ones you felt were added on. Again, thank you.
The last line on the second and third stanza were intentional as I felt these would be voiced with a trailing off to almost a whisper. I think on the third stanza, it shouldn't be a question mark. I am also not sure about the structure of the first and second "should they be split into three, or joined into one?"
My punctuation amongst many other things is suspect too! As to the other "last lines" could you perhaps point out ones you felt were added on. Again, thank you.