03-20-2014, 06:58 AM
Technically I have little problem with this, content-wise I wonder where all the vitriol is coming from. It makes me wonder more about the speaker than the two-bit rip-off artist that finally got what was coming to him. I mean there are some clever uses of his product titles such as " mega memory", but still... Most people want instant something, they hope for some magic, like the fifteen year old boy who recently wanted us to give him a link to "fix" his POS poem.
If this were just funny, it would be OK, but the speaker seems so antagonistic it just comes off as a slightly unhinged rant. The instant Karma approach would probably work if you kept it light. As for the last stanza, It's like Barnum says... but usually they wise up after a time or two. Sorry, I just don't see it as an us versus them, that way leads to paranoia and insanity.
Dale
If this were just funny, it would be OK, but the speaker seems so antagonistic it just comes off as a slightly unhinged rant. The instant Karma approach would probably work if you kept it light. As for the last stanza, It's like Barnum says... but usually they wise up after a time or two. Sorry, I just don't see it as an us versus them, that way leads to paranoia and insanity.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.