Haiku: A Wetness
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(03-19-2014, 08:20 PM)ChristopherSea Wrote:  Lovely image and a sensual piece. In the spirit of the form's brevity you could add a comma after night and drop: with, still, a. Thanks for the read.
More in tune w/5-7-5 now. Not a must, but something my Writers' Group tries to adhere to when we finish a session.\

Thanks.

Listening to you
last night, your brown hair still damp:
a lovely word bath
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Haiku: A Wetness - by 71degrees - 03-19-2014, 10:00 AM
RE: Haiku: A Wetness - by ChristopherSea - 03-19-2014, 08:20 PM
RE: Haiku: A Wetness - by 71degrees - 03-19-2014, 11:36 PM
RE: Haiku: A Wetness - by billy - 03-22-2014, 04:58 PM
RE: Haiku: A Wetness - by milo - 03-22-2014, 10:48 PM



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