Going Home [2nd edit]

[PoetryAndPhysics]

P&P:
"Consider ending without referring back to the narrator. Just a final a metaphor would do fine." - I'm not sure what you're saying in the last bit.

I meant that you don't have to refer back to the narrator at the very end, just tell a short allegory in a few lines (allegory would've been a better word choice than metaphor, no?... take my literary terms with a grain of salt). In your current version, that would mean ending the poem with "Seeing" (although if you agree, you should extend the story). Anyway...