03-17-2014, 05:44 PM
First and foremost, thank you for your soulful expression. The truth is that i am by no means a poet, English major, nor am i a major of anything at all. If my opinion comes off as "Naive", its because it more than likely is. With that being said;
As i stated, i am no literary scholar nor a scholar of anything, besides crime maybe...
The title has potential to "pop", but as someone previously stated, it lacks punctuation, it has no "definition". "Come leaves, burst!" is more exciting in my opinion and "Spring leaves burst" seems more appropriate, in the matter of no punctuation. "Spring leaves" also gives a hint as to what your poem is going to be about. Opening a chance for the less analytical reader, (such as myself) giving them more of an idea of what the poem is to be about, yielding simplicity to pieces of such eloquence, "rendering understanding for multiple levels of comprehension of creative expression in such creations.
Overall, I enjoyed it in the fact that it kept my mind busy. It kept my perceptions on edge, questioning what meaning means to someone other than myself. I felt it hard to read in ease of "flow", only as a result of my own reading comprehension.
Enjoyable and much appreciated!!!
As i stated, i am no literary scholar nor a scholar of anything, besides crime maybe...
The title has potential to "pop", but as someone previously stated, it lacks punctuation, it has no "definition". "Come leaves, burst!" is more exciting in my opinion and "Spring leaves burst" seems more appropriate, in the matter of no punctuation. "Spring leaves" also gives a hint as to what your poem is going to be about. Opening a chance for the less analytical reader, (such as myself) giving them more of an idea of what the poem is to be about, yielding simplicity to pieces of such eloquence, "rendering understanding for multiple levels of comprehension of creative expression in such creations.
Overall, I enjoyed it in the fact that it kept my mind busy. It kept my perceptions on edge, questioning what meaning means to someone other than myself. I felt it hard to read in ease of "flow", only as a result of my own reading comprehension.
Enjoyable and much appreciated!!!