03-13-2014, 08:14 PM
Hello Carousal,
This is a fine concrete poem. The image is immediately connected to the title, but the note does help with some of the passages. Many of these lines are gorgeous. However, that 'smell' of 'Music dust in crushed burgundy' was too abstract for my nose. I assume that 'Nimrod' is a composition by Elgar, but you also have Dvorak above, which is confusing (it's probably me). I see this as a collage of a night at this grand old hall with an unparalleled history.
Thanks for sharing your poem and welcome to the site./Chris
This is a fine concrete poem. The image is immediately connected to the title, but the note does help with some of the passages. Many of these lines are gorgeous. However, that 'smell' of 'Music dust in crushed burgundy' was too abstract for my nose. I assume that 'Nimrod' is a composition by Elgar, but you also have Dvorak above, which is confusing (it's probably me). I see this as a collage of a night at this grand old hall with an unparalleled history.
Thanks for sharing your poem and welcome to the site./Chris
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris