03-13-2014, 09:41 AM
I love that you describe the first few fragments as "sketches"; sketching as a literary term is underused
I like the staccato style of those fragments; they create an idiosyncratic rhythm which is pleasing to read, as each little sentence and clause builds towards a complete image. The "silly" poem is great, though you really overkill "the" in S2 (L4, for instance, doesn't need either of its "the"s). Thank you for the read!
I like the staccato style of those fragments; they create an idiosyncratic rhythm which is pleasing to read, as each little sentence and clause builds towards a complete image. The "silly" poem is great, though you really overkill "the" in S2 (L4, for instance, doesn't need either of its "the"s). Thank you for the read!
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe