Just A Little Diddy

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Ray has a bunch of great image poems, here's a list of his threads.
rayheinrich

Okay, maybe your beneath does work. I'm going to keep reading.

Love and vulnerability are always inseparable to me in this life. To give in such a way fulling knowing that loss awaits, whether it strikes quick and fierce, or bides its time.

I hear you there, bud. I've got a pile of not very good poems written on just that.

In the workshop threads we really need to stick to the poem at hand, but since we're in Misc., a quick comment on nailclipper vs machete editing on the poem you mentioned: The lines I cut were details I thought might be interesting only to me, too much info without any real weight. But I love to edit and I can restore it if I decide to. I'd love your comments on that thread, it helps me with each edit to review them. Maybe better punctuation might help it.....

Back to your poem, I had a problem following the punctuation here:

Demon of indifference,
Intimate irony
Fixed upon your essence
Pure possibility

Ushering in the fear
Crowding a lonely thought:
No image will appear
To justify your plot.

I might have an easier time if you didn't capitalize each line. Why do you do that?