03-11-2014, 02:43 PM
Keith,
"a goblins" shouldn't this be possessive? "a goblin's"
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"but guilt is at my stomach,
scratching away like a rat trapped
in a heated copper pot strapped
to my belly."
Seems an inordinate long way to go for a description, also "Stomach" and "belly" seem a bit redundant.
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Where is it illegal to eat wild bird eggs? Not that I want to. I've never heard of such a thing.
dale
"a goblins" shouldn't this be possessive? "a goblin's"
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"but guilt is at my stomach,
scratching away like a rat trapped
in a heated copper pot strapped
to my belly."
Seems an inordinate long way to go for a description, also "Stomach" and "belly" seem a bit redundant.
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Where is it illegal to eat wild bird eggs? Not that I want to. I've never heard of such a thing.
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.