03-11-2014, 08:37 AM
I would like to see it end on "dissipate" causing it to end on a stronger note as it picks up the rhyme of "take" and "weight".
Also overall. the focus tends to wander, and I am not quite sure what Hera is railing against, patriarchy, man's sex drive, et al. Also, Hera places the blame of women having to dress scantily at the feet of men. Plus if man's desire for women disappear, the human race will cease to exists fairly quickly, and thus will the gods also disappear, so it seems a bit contradictory.
Just my take on it today, I might change my mind tomorrow
Dale
Also overall. the focus tends to wander, and I am not quite sure what Hera is railing against, patriarchy, man's sex drive, et al. Also, Hera places the blame of women having to dress scantily at the feet of men. Plus if man's desire for women disappear, the human race will cease to exists fairly quickly, and thus will the gods also disappear, so it seems a bit contradictory.
Just my take on it today, I might change my mind tomorrow
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.