03-10-2014, 04:57 PM
Well, there are a few minor grammatical errors.
I pretty much agree with the latter posters.
It seems you want an air of mystery in this poem. So, maybe play on that. Hint at what you're thinking and leave the reader guessing. This poem is quite straightforward. If you think about such mature things, show that in the poem rather than just stating you do.
I pretty much agree with the latter posters.
It seems you want an air of mystery in this poem. So, maybe play on that. Hint at what you're thinking and leave the reader guessing. This poem is quite straightforward. If you think about such mature things, show that in the poem rather than just stating you do.