03-10-2014, 10:16 AM
Like the the double meaning at the beginning (Whores shoe/horseshoe). First line…clever! I don't understand all of it but think this can be published on the right website. It's heavily sexual yet confusing but I don't know that I need to understand all of it. Not sure About the last stanza "Unshooed haw frost spores the door./Yays to the right" I am imagining that it is a frosty winter and things are frozen in strange shapes. What does that mean? There is a feeling of a prostitute or loose woman who is unhappy with her sordid life. The randomness of the poem works for me. I see many modern images like the diet, two bars on, even though there is obscurity (what is a slanket slug?)
I can see some people not relating to this poem as it is indeed obscure and off the wall but I can relate to the raw imagery. Maybe you could title it "Bolly pink to light the way"?
"Speak less than thou knowest" - Shakespeare
I can see some people not relating to this poem as it is indeed obscure and off the wall but I can relate to the raw imagery. Maybe you could title it "Bolly pink to light the way"?
"Speak less than thou knowest" - Shakespeare