A cry for help
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(03-10-2014, 01:28 AM)justcloudy Wrote:  Creepy-- yes. Insightful-- also. A way of explaining something unspeakable to the outside world-- absolutely.
I know I'll be reading this again... and again.
Thanks for sharing.
Thanks for the kind words JC much appreciated. Keith

(03-10-2014, 04:04 AM)tectak Wrote:  
(03-09-2014, 09:11 AM)Keith Wrote:  I should explain,
there are four of us in total,
five if I include Keith,
I'm Rob the confident one.

There's John he's intelligent but shy,
and Susie she's in a class of her own
the fourth I call the monster,
he has been growing.

We all have our rooms
inside Keith's mind,
one window and a door,
when a door unlocks your in control. Erthonaism. you're

I saw the monster move this morning,
its huge body splintered the door frame
as it hurried to its prize.
I am now in a strangers home.stranger's
This body is wasting away,
hands trembling and bloody,
I have a family tied together on my left,
they won't stop screaming,
I don't know why,
I can hear the monster coming back,
Keith needs your help.

Little blind mice see how they run cut off their toes with a carving knife see how they run
Some minor grammatical errors but a delightful tale of family life.
Best,
tectak
Thank you tectak for the grandma tickle errors, I have made some adjustments. I'm glad its not just my family life that's like this, thanks for sharing. Rob

If your undies fer you've been smoking through em, don't peg em out
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Messages In This Thread
A cry for help - by Keith - 03-09-2014, 09:11 AM
RE: A cry for help - by Leanne - 03-09-2014, 09:15 AM
RE: A cry for help - by Keith - 03-09-2014, 09:28 AM
RE: A cry for help - by billy - 03-09-2014, 09:24 AM
RE: A cry for help - by billy - 03-09-2014, 09:36 AM
RE: A cry for help - by justcloudy - 03-10-2014, 01:28 AM
RE: A cry for help - by Keith - 03-10-2014, 04:20 AM
RE: A cry for help - by tectak - 03-10-2014, 04:04 AM



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