03-09-2014, 11:06 PM
"Defense is no way to improve..."
sorry about the posture. brown liquor and lack of sleep. I am digesting the rest of what you said and the writing in toto. thanks for your time.
sorry about the posture. brown liquor and lack of sleep. I am digesting the rest of what you said and the writing in toto. thanks for your time.
(03-08-2014, 09:06 PM)jeremyyoung Wrote: This isn't a poem, it is a sketch.... complete with notes to self - 'fucked up (drunk)', 'is that racist?' 'she was a pill head and/or a drunk.you are correct. it is a sketch. scrawled out in 15 minutes while in a bleak mood. happens!
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There are some nice bits of word play.... 'chlamydia, crabs and HIV doing a pincer movement' for instance.
(03-08-2014, 03:47 PM)billy Wrote: yeah i know that, i did get it. i'm just saying for me the cotton picker-speak didn't work for me. i'm sorry for being stupid, i don't think you're racistsorry, billy. it was a bad day. and bad writing from the start.what i'm saying is the point isn't as sharp as you think. forgive if i'm wrong in thinking the poem has a racist side to it. but it really does
not you...the poem, or to me it does. and replying to me isn't trolling :J: