1984 Re-interpreted

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1984 Re-interpreted

The soft looking waitress slid Yeah! I wanna piece of that pie
the piece of French silk pie
across the table, filled
your coffee mug like you
were a recovering alcoholic and a cup of coffee for that matter

It was 3:30 am, it was 1984,
and she wore that erotic orange
serving outfit when she asked you
to hold your cup still up over
the pie; hell, holding your breath
wasn’t nothing like holding
a real woman Loved it. I like the repeating of "It was " in the first line.

but when you came back
the next evening after Lit. finals
only to be told Julia had quit,
you wished there had been ways
to watch which way she had left
your life for good so you could follow
her into oblivion rather than return
to a real life I may be dense, but I didn't get the connection to Orwel's book. I get the name of the poem and Julia references, but I needed more to make the connection if this is what youj intended.

Good work, I enjoyed it.

Chris

Thanks, Chris. Am glad you liked it. The poem is connected to the book in title only. I doubt a majority of folks on this forum have read it. Heard of it, I hope, but it's not necessary to have read it. One can re-interpret anything from its original form and it's no longer its original form. If the truth be known, I don't have a clue if the waitresses name was Julia or not, but I was reading the book for Lit. Final.

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just the one nit, for me the enjambment in general felt a bit to much. created pauses where they didn't work that well.
the content is excellently descriptive.

i never saw how 84 was re-written but that was okay. julia made it a more personal poem but not sure it was relevant for me (not a nit just my POV) i like the subtle sophistication of of the Lit student.
thanks for the read, i enjoyed it

Glad you enjoyed it. Nowhere does it say 1984 was re-written. It was re-interpreted. At least according to the title. But thanks for the read anyway.

i just saw reinterpreted as rewritten as it was in text

Okay. Still don't know what "in text" means. But it must mean something to you so I'm sure it's valid. Again, thanks.