03-07-2014, 06:05 AM
71d
"filled
your coffee mug like you
were a recovering alcoholic"
I think you need to use his instead of you. I wasn't there, but the way this was written it sounds as thought I were.
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I understand the connection to Julia, but it has been too long since I read "1984" to make much of a connection with this, as such I can't really comment on this. It is a nice descriptive scene. In some ways it reminds me of Camus.
Dale
"filled
your coffee mug like you
were a recovering alcoholic"
I think you need to use his instead of you. I wasn't there, but the way this was written it sounds as thought I were.
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I understand the connection to Julia, but it has been too long since I read "1984" to make much of a connection with this, as such I can't really comment on this. It is a nice descriptive scene. In some ways it reminds me of Camus.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.